100WC-week 16- Pham Ngoc Linh, 6A1, HNTL

Along time ago, there was a very selfish man. One day, he met a wizard. He was told the wizard that he is the a­ stupid old man. That wizard was very angry and he promised that he will get revenge. One day, that wizard met that man. “It’s time to get revenge!” the wizard thought. He told that selfish man that he will give him a surprise. That selfish man asked for the surprise. The wizard took some water and he thought the water to him. The man became weird creature created by a hand and an ugly face.

by Pham Ngoc Linh, 6A1, Hanoi Thanglong, Hanoi, Vietnam.

2 thoughts on “100WC-week 16- Pham Ngoc Linh, 6A1, HNTL”

  1. Well I certainly wouldn’t want to cross that wizard; seems that he holds a grudge!
    Great, and accurate use of speech in your story.
    Keep writing.

    Mr W
    Rauceby CofE Primary, Lincolnshire. UK

  2. This is an interesting approach. I like how you didn’t introduce the hand/face straight away but built up the story first. Well done.

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