Week 15, Linh, Hanoi Thanglong

In the beginning, there was a little dog who loves to come to the forest. One day, he went to the forest and he saw a lion. The lion said: “I will eat you”. The dog was very scared but he has an idea. He said to the lion “Hey! Let me dance this moves. But please just bring me a bell, then you can eat me”. The lion brings him the bell and he started to dance with the music. But the farmer was heard that noise so he came and beat the lion to save the dog

Pham Ngoc Linh, 6A1, Hanoi Thanglong School, Hanoi, Vietnam.

One thought on “Week 15, Linh, Hanoi Thanglong”

  1. Hello Linh,

    The dog in your story is quite clever. His idea to make a bell ring in order to save him from being eaten by the lion is perfect. The farmer must have had very good ears!
    The events in your story build naturally from one to the next. It makes the excitement of the plot grow as the story moves along.
    As a way to make your writing even better, try to have your sentences not run-on with too many thoughts combined into each one. I encourage my students to have one thought per sentence so the story is easy to understand and enjoyable to read.

    Thank you for sharing your writing,
    Gina Ruffcorn (Team 100, Iowa USA)

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